Sunday, October 28, 2007, 8:03p.m.
Thursday was when each class member brought in a rough draft of their analysis paper on the comparison between Blu-Ray and HD DVD, where their peers would review and edit one persons’ paper. First each group formed and exchanged papers. I traded papers with Taylor. His paper followed the format of the paper very well, each topic was completely identifiable with a title that was bold and underlined. Each topic was touched upon enough to get his point across. The recommendations I had for Taylor was his grammar in the analysis portion and the number of sources he used. He had a couple run on sentences and had repeated a few sentences. The minimum number of sources for the assignments was six and he only had used three. After he makes those corrections he should have a solid paper to turn in. The only recommendations that Taylor had for my paper was mostly grammar corrections; spelling, run on sentences and punctuation.
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